2011年5月26日 星期四

Expressing an opinion-1

That students should wear uniform to school or not has been discussed for a few time.  Majority of people regard that students don’t wear uniform to school as liberty and a policy the authority concerned should implement, while what I think is that wearing uniform to school is more convenient than wearing leisure wears.  It’s because students don’t spend too much time chosing which clothes they should wear before going to school.  If students dress in leisure wear to school, it may take quite a little time to those who want to look more beautiful and handsome to decide the clothes, which contributes to them to go to school late.  Additionally, some continue to argue that students don’t have to wear uniform to school, but the condition now in every school backs up that students wear uniform to school looks more regular and can be identified.  If students get lost while going field trip; the police can help find them more easily.  Moreover, if students wearing uniforms were attacked by the gangs and passed out, passersby can call the school to help make contact with their parents by telling their student numbers.  Last but not the least, no one can argue against the fact that if students wear uniform to school, they can be safer.  That is, if a stranger or a thief runs into a school, securities, teachers and military instructors can catch him immediately before he hurts students, makes school into a chaos and commits crimes.  Taking into account all of these points, it should be clear that student should wear uniform to school.

6 則留言:

  1. 第一句的That可改Whether會比較好唷!
    因為後面有or not感覺比較順~
    implement要用被動式~
    chosing-->choosing
    dress in-->dressed in或dressing不要加介係詞
    If students get lost while going field trip;
    分號應該是不小心打錯的吧:))
    很喜歡最後一個論點唷!
    開頭和結尾都別具心裁

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  2. It's because students don't spend~chosing~. chosing->choosing
    If students dress in leisure ~.dressed in好像是要改這樣吧

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  3. 好討厭看你的文章
    每次都寫一大堆!!

    chosing(少一個o)
    寫那麼多,還寫的那麼好!!生氣!!

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  4. unifrom用複數比較好吧!
    論點好多~都還滿有說服力的~Good~

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  5. uniform可以數
    chosing→choosing
    其他都蠻棒的~!

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  6. chosing改成choosing
    其他就沒錯了

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