I was a hardworking athlete and once won a championship in a race, but everything changed owing to a terrible accident, which occurred on my way home after the race. I was hit by a truck and passed out immediately on account of shedding too much blood. Although I was sent to the hospital at once, I lost my consciousness for at least one month. After I came to myself, I have negative attitude toward my life, trying to kill myself. One day, however, while I was fooling around in a wheel chair in the hospital, there was an elder man, who lost his leg doing his best to walk with a stick. Although he fell down again and again, he never gave up. A thought suddenly came to my mind that I should practice walking instead of keeping feeling depress day after day, and then I made up my mind to take part in the race five years later. Finally, my effort paid back and I won a championship again. As the proverb goes, “Where there is a will, there is a way.” If I tried, there must be some opportunities for me to succeed.
there was an elder man, who lost his leg doing his best to walk with a stick. 敝人可以問一下為什麼"doing"要用 V-ing 嗎。
回覆刪除第五行的I have negative.. 要改成I had哦~
回覆刪除寫得好厲害:">
標題是Where there is a "will"唷!
回覆刪除effort不知道需不需要加s勒???
A thought suddenly came to my mind that I should practice walking instead of keeping feeling depress day after day, and then I made up my mind to take part in the race five years later.那個depress好像是動詞所以是不是要加ing還是改形容詞?
回覆刪除1. I have negative attitude toward my life 要用had吧!
回覆刪除2.最後一句的effort要加S吧!
depress改成depressed吧...
回覆刪除大家都講完了~~
回覆刪除所以就沒問題囉:D
there was an elder man, who lost his leg doing his best to walk with a stick.
回覆刪除-> This seems to be a correct sentence, but actually it can be presented more formally in another way. Think about this...
an elder man who lost both of his legs tried his best to walk with a stick.
feeling depress day after day
回覆刪除feel後面是加形容詞喔!
應該是depressed
標題的will錯了
回覆刪除I have negative attitude toward my life應該要改成had