Both John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are important Americans. They play significant parts in American Revolution. Additionally, John Adams delegate to the Continental Congress like Thomas Jefferson. When it comes about Declaration of Independence, John Adams is one of the signers, and so is Thomas Jefferson. Moreover, not only did they study and practice law, but also was the president of United States . On July fourth in 1826 John Adams died. Likewise, Thomas Jefferson passed away on this day. There are many similarities between John Adams and Thomas Jefferson.
我覺得全部都用過去式會比較好喔
回覆刪除Additionally, John Adams delegate to the Continental Congress like Thomas Jefferson. (was delegated...)
When it comes about (to )
John Adams delegate(沒有逼動詞
回覆刪除整體很通順~真不愧是蔡孟孟喔!
回覆刪除我也絕得用過去式比較好
回覆刪除第三行是when it comes to 哦
感覺最後一句比較像是用在topic sentence耶~
回覆刪除上一篇寫得比較好^^
時態要注意
回覆刪除大部分的事實都是過去式比較好
Moreover, not only did they study and practice law, but also was the president of United States.
回覆刪除but also 後面動詞應該是were吧...